the Theory of ....Nothing ?!

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Updated 06/07/2023
Created 02/23/2015
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Ashesh9
Ashesh9
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  Neither a thought
 nor a thinker be---
   let go of Ego

         &
       become
      Ever-Free
 ....................

Ashesh9
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greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 9 years ago

Ash,

The revised version is more yours, my friend, than mine. The alliteration of "g" and "be" and the dropping of "of" have made a good poem better.

Ashesh9Ashesh9about 9 years agoAuthor
GM : here's your version ----

Neither thought

Nor

Thinker

Be

Let go ego :

Be

Ever Free

.............................

This version's much more appealing because Mother Saraswati Goddess of learning sits on your shoulders & whispers to you GM : alas i am not so fortunate !!!

Ashesh9Ashesh9about 9 years agoAuthor
Pel not " non existence " but

Universal Reality ! But first try to clear your Mind of thoughts : what remains ? Consciousness - Existence - Bliss !

Just like this iPad i'm using if i clear tge screen of Lit or FB : what remains ? The very White lit screen which is Potentially Everythin' but actually Nothin' !!!

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 9 years ago

Not bad at all, Ash, something I try to do with tai chi every day in spite of my "monkey mind."

I might have deleted the "a" in line 2 because I think it sounds better without it, and I'm also into paring down as much as possible. That is, it means the same thing without it, so arguably it's superfluous. When I write something, even when it feels good, I like to review the draft to see if I can eliminate any word without changing the meaning.

Speaking of which, here's another thought: There's nothing wrong with "become" but it occurred to me if you used "be" instead it would re-enforce a state of being rather rather than becoming, thus inferring we're a part of the Ever Free which I interpreted as the Ultimate Being. I also think being rather than becoming is more consistent with letting go.

Nice job. I enjoyed thinking about what was in the poem.

pelegrinopelegrinoabout 9 years ago

I 5ed this one, Ash, because of its strength of expression and I think the recommendation by Senna is well deserved.

On its philosophy I am a little scared. Is freedom to be achieved only in a state of non-existence? Here the "ego" represents to me the "1", who has the freedom if the number becomes "0" ?