All Comments on 'Allen & Ashlyn: Valentines Day'

Your story has potential but you include too much inane detail and you are too repetitive. For Example: We got in Dad's mustang to go to the restaurant. We drove to the restaurant. And, your tags! What's that all about? "ashlyn put", "ashlyn walked"??? You need a good editor.

I liked most of this story. I loved the previous 2 entries. I didn't like the slap in the face, nor fisting, nor anal, I personally feel that love is best worn respect, that's me.

I can't even read stories jere anymore because my house it stank in here

This was a terrible SL and very poorly written. I seriously don't understand why this utter trash was among the list of contest winners. It's very undeserving of any honourable recognition although I would recommend this win the "Most boring and horrifyingly ridiculous story ever written". Please stop writing, I'm embarrassed for the both of us.

Noooooo. No other people.

your such a great artikst. and this story is oh so great.

Bad story. No seductive buildup but rather just a string of fuck descriptions. As for what passes as a plot there were too many mistakes to bother mentioning. The writing style? Superfluous and fragmented. Don't see how this managed to get rated as a contest winner. Maybe there no other entries . . . .