by mstrspet
Great beginning but the ending was really a let down. I was expecting so much more from the way the story was heading. You went from intense to nothing. I think you should look the story over and at some time rewrite a more exciting ending. It has a lot of potential. Good luck in the contest. I gave you a fair vote.
Thank you for reading and your honesty about the story. to be honest i was stumpted in the end. the beginning is based on a my true life happenings and i had to adjust the age thing because of the obvious.. though i was a young child and so i try to "avoid" "scary" things and i too was wanting "more" for the ending but wasnt sure where to go with it. The fact of someone abducting me and so on was intence then it was only a nigtmare.. but i am sure i can conjure up more of things he did to her.. finding a door and "doing" things to her and so on. Again thanks. i hope i win too but i am sure there are much better writers hehe
The story has great potential. Started great, with good plot and great narration. But at the end I felt like you leaved me hanging. I don't know, I expected more, you should consider add more to the story. It really needs a sequel. You sure a talented writer. Keep doing it.