by TheKiss
...a very good ending! Glad you managed to finish it, and dont worry about timescales, everyone has a real life that keeps them from writing. Looking forward to reading more from you!
thats one very sweet ending for them it would be so nice to hear from them again.
great ending! happy that everything turned out so well. excited to hear you are thinking about doing more stories about the fam :)
loved this series. I'm hoping you do conitune...with mateo and mel, perhaps?!?!!
what do you mean "I can't tell you what the future will bring"
of course they will get married and have babies!!! duh? LOL. thanks for the nice ending.
I've been waiting for the ending to this story for a while now. although I thought it would be a few more chapters. I fell in love with this story the first time I read it. Thanks for sharing it with us I really liked it.
This was a wonderful series... Definitely one of the best I've read on literotica. You captured so well the misunderstandings and confusion and passion of being a young adult. Your characterization, pacing, and story lines were excellent. I thought Kes' first time was a little unrealistic (would have hurt more), and I skipped some of the later sex scenes because they interrupted the story line. However, your well-drawn characters, well-chosen descriptions, well-written dialogue, and just overall excellent writing, made this series truly a joy to read.
Loved everthing about it!! The story and the characters were perfectly written and easy to relate to. I loved it 10/10!!
I would like to see something happen between mel and matt... maybe in your next atory. But well done! your an amazing writer!
this was a good read. i liked the chemistry between all of the characters. you should definitely post again soon!
really enjoyed your story, great writing and characters and awesome sex scenes. Hope you write more
well written cute story. very intriguing sex scenes and good overall plot. nice job. =D
Well written and interesting. Looking forward to the next installment with Mel and Matt. Looks like something is happening there! Thanks for writing a good one.
I love this story! Humour, romance and love all around!
Fabulous!
Bravo!
Great story!! 2 points of view made it interesting as hell :) n I love Luis and Tommy haha. Great Job !
I don't know how I never found the story before but it sure made my sunday a helluva lot better. 5 stars
3/5
I appreciate the way you ended the story but it could have been more pleasant if you would have taken more time to reveal their relationship.
At first you illustrated everything with slow pace and suddenly in last chapter everything ends abruptly. Naaaa
Actuality is missing, to be honest.
Seems like a fantasy than to be a romantic story.
I hope you will try to cut this sick-flick sexy drama and concentrate more on immaculate relationship building.
Don't get me in a wrong way....I literally enjoyed your story and irrespective of strong characters, plot collapsed and that where everything went wrong.
Wish you the very best for future stories and hope I will enjoy more if you pour in it more.
-- jokerjck
you mentioned you were going to continue writing about these people.... As a fan, I'd be happy to grovel on my knees if it'd make you write more... Please! I love your writing style, and I'd love to read about Matt, and Mel. Preferably together, but that's just me... :P
please!
Please start writing already about Mel & Matt. I would love to see Matt break down the front he puts up as he falls in love with Mel
Very good story. I really do enjoy stories that are complete.
This covers the complete series, Chapters 1 - 7.
Liked the story from beginning through the end.
The story just seemed to work all the way.
*spoilers*
Like the part where Rebecca lies but Res actually went inside the apartment to shout at him and not run away crying. Cause if she had then I swear I would have stopped reading the story then and there. And this seems more 'Res' too because she definitely doesn't take shit from anyone. Just didn't like the way she was trying to discover her sexuality. She treated Gabe too casually.
But overall, I love the story and the 3 brothers actually add to the dimensions of this story. But why does Matt not have a steady girlfriend right now?
He seems too mature to be into flings as he is basically the Head of the family and almost 24? Whatever I just loved the potential of this tale and maybe a little more effort would have made it Perfect with a capital P.
Anyhow I loved it. Of course somethings are there that I don't have to like but that add to the depth of this story. Maybe mentioning her having sex with one of her BFs was important to realise what she felt for Gabe but I just wonder what if it wasn't mentioned. Atleast I would have had a 'Feel Good' thing that Gabe was her first and only. But like I said, I don't have to like it. Still wonder about their future. Hopefully an Epilogue is on way (yeah right after 11 year!). Or I can just think of one.(Hint: I am a very optimistic person so probably marriage, kids, they run the garage together with Res taking care of accounting aspect, Mel and Matt getting together, Rico...no clue where he fits)