by Black Tulip
Free flowing story , interesting phrasing , slightly weak on the sumation , butt then again , I don't write , I just read ... Well done .
Now, it is much better after the edit. Good work my dear flower of the dark.
I meant tale...Tantalizing, interesting, allureing, captivating and kept me guessing as to where you would take your tail, (tale) he he he Good luck B~ (*_*) Happy Halloween.
I admire anyone who can work in a language that isn't their own. It's even more stunning when the work is of such quality. You outdid yourself here BT.
-Colly
Tricked or treated is fantastic! Your word useage says you have great command of a wide vocabulary. I loved reading this tale.
The only one negative thing I can think of is that I was a touch disapointed that in return for Una freeing the spirit he gave her great sex but nothing lasting....for example Coyle's return for her willingness.
But that is a minor thing in what is a damn good read.
DW
A great, well written, tale. Your words conjured images which were quite vivid, with descriptions that had me feeling the cold almost as much as the characters.
Best of luck!
Like what everyone else has said.. wow!!
Your use of language is amazing, and imagery was so well described. Fantastic job BT!!
Oh, and you can write the chants for my stories anytime!!
;-)
I loved the way the story unfolded -- and the hot/cold -- and the ending. Whew!
What a cool story! Your settings were wonderful, and the description of the spirit left me breathless!
Has everything: spooks, sex, witches and lots of action. Nicely done, BT!
What can I say, I'm a fan and I always find myself getting caught up in your stories.
You are a wonderful weaver of words, capturing the reader in a new setting, seeing through the characters eyes and pleasantly arousing the senses.
Great Black Tulip, I like your use of description and the imaginative character names. Speaking of which, there were a bit too many of them introduced at once to keep them all straight. Otherwise, a near perfect story....I'm envious!
So descriptive! A fantastic story, your artistry shines through! Good luck!
... and beautifully told, too. Very nice work. I usually find present tense irritating but I never even noticed it!
Spooky, sexy, & smart. Great story, BT!
(thermometer left at default and does not reflect my vote)
A very well written story with amazing imagery, and masterfully weaved with a great combination of eroticism and creepiness. Well done, you got my 5!
You have my 5 also. Great story, I agree with all the previous comments and all that I can add is that I especially liked the ending.
Quite a tale. One that grabbed me and kept me in until the very end. Loved the twist at the end as well. You're knowledge of...certain things...quite...accurate to I believe.;)
Not usually a big reader of ghost and spirits but I fell in love with this one. It had the perfect combination of sex, emotion, plot and a excellent twist at the end. CB
That was amazing. I've never read anything like that. It was just wonderful.