by Sander Roscoe Wolff
This was interesting to read after reading neo's poem on the same topic. Like a hooked carp? lol That's one way too look at it. Good poem.
...in some other hotel room, an inadvertant audio-eur. This was well done. Thanks.
Tess
I really enjoyed the originality of this work:
quote:
As their headboard
bangs a jumbled tattoo,
I join them, gasping
like a hooked carp at our shared
moment of completion
Just what I love a writer seeks out to describe the ordinary in an original and extra ordinary vision...use of some great rhetorical weaving!
Du Lac
mentioned in the Sunday reviews...
Especially at this part,
"As their headboard
bangs a jumbled tattoo,
I join them, gasping
like a hooked carp at our shared
moment of completion."
it makes me reflect back sometime ago in hotel too. but i am not going to go any further with that. it's a perfect piece that many can relate too. it's the ending that i love the most as shown below:
I wonder if they
search for a tissue,
too.
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nice job!!!......don