by FrankjrBauer
Despite you not being native english spoken, your writing is well (might get you a B in creative writing)
It's amazing with two comments so far, one is positive one totally negative, but the votes tell a different story.
Even if my taste is a bit different, a well done from me, and keep it up.
Will read your other stories now, to see how they are compared to the english ones.
I tried to ignore it but it's just that bad I have to stop before punch someone as they pass by. Think of normal conversations.. the use of darling and my love is never used so early in a relationship. And never every second word as you seem to have done. Your imagination and description of events isn't bad at all .. just work on the dialogue please