All Comments on 'Becoming Daddy's Good Girl Ch. 02'

I have read this series already on another site and enjoyed them immensely. I am enjoying them again. They are well written, intense and exciting.

I have read chapter 1 of this story yesterday and chapter 2 today. I agree with foren7813. At the slumber party, after Sun arrive, she should strip naked for Melody's father and he should fuck them both.

Please consider a proofreader. The mistakes were distracting from the story

So hott! Can't wait for the next chapters!

Really enjoying the series

I didn’t realize this was a series. Nice job on the follow up chapter.

I just found your stories and have gotten through the third chapter and will probably be up late tonight reading more. Your words paint such beautiful, erotic pictures. I have always fantasized about having a daughter like she is. Thank you for the work you did on the story.

love the girl on girl

I colloid see how angry he was.

(could)

The father is just a manwhore

I’m out darn authors I don’t like lesbian put a damn tags for it jeez. First one good second bad person 3rd probably bad to. Can a story ever just be nice wholesome straight incest why is it always lesbian or something similar.

I like the plot, it's just the lack of editing and the repetitive use of some words (incestuous) and back story. Sometimes the author repeats themselves in the next sentence. I shouldn't be such a grammar nerd, but I can't help it.

I wanna be daddy's good girl too!

Good story. You need an editor to catch silly goofs like;

"His thick cock popped my chair and had had me moaning"

I'd moan too if my cock broke a chair.

Not trying to be petty or sarcastic, erotica has a rhythm and flow, which is broken by easily fixing stuff.

Don't get me wrong, I'll still enjoy your work, butt it would be even better goofless. 4* and a future review.

Holy shit this was an awesome read. Keep it going, great plot flow, great characters. Daddy is the best daddy.

An EXCELLENT story to date

Unfortunately you are in serious need of a proofreader/editor as there are a number of grammatical and spelling errors.