All Comments on 'Camille's New Residency Ch. 01'

Anymore

Maybe if she'd gone to "college" instead of "collage" she wouldn't be so fucked up in the head. If you're going to try and make a comeback at least get the spelling right. 1*

You have laid the groundwork to a wonderful seductive story.

Kind of a slow start, but it's honestly a really interesting concept. Can't wait to read more!

Very good I enjoyed it and look forward to the next part.

Excellent beginning and great character development. I look forward to the next chapters.

Liked it looking forward to part 2

Seeds of a very good story.

A very nice first effort. Looking forward to the next installment.

Great start, I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

Like this piece; captured my attention with intriguing albeit maybe a bit stereotypical characters, interesting, maybe predictable storyline and just enough teasing sex. The beginning background is very well done, and Camille’s self reflection early on heightened my curiosity and creates just a bit of tension: “It had only been a few weeks since she ruined everything for herself,…”. Now if that is about flunking exam, the line is uninteresting as we already know that, so maybe about something more personally consequential. Thought that the conversation with Ellie is drawn out a bit much and interrupts the flow/pace. From a storyline perspective, after a half hour of conversation followed by more probing followed by progressing into private topics — hours of conversation and we learn almost nothing about Camille’s shortcomings (other than what we glean from her behavior and the verbs/descriptors you use to describe her behavior). Maybe that is by design. Long/short: looking forward to seeing where you take Camille and your readers. Oh, by the way, you’ve posted in the past, so you know enough to smile and ignore snarky comments.

Looking forward to seeing how Ellie pulls Camille out of her mess

Good start. Perhaps needs to flow more, you jump around a bit.

On to part 2!

Very sexy, The slow seduction of one somewhat unsuspecting person by anotheris always a turn-on, at for me. I'm looking very much forward to Camille succumbing to Ellie's advances.

Nice writing.