by JoeDreamer
Fantastic. The story was in no way shallow, and the build-up did not seem forced or unnatural. I like the way the story is headed, and if I had to make any suggestions, I'd say this:
Describe the twins a bit more (their physical appearance, proportions, etc.), and work on the dialogue. It's pretty clear that the girls and the rest of the family are rather intelligent, but saying something like "I can feel the heat your pussy is generating" seems a bit unrealistic to me.
But it's up to you. Your call. Other than that, great story, and I can't wait to see what you do with it next.
I just love nasty twin sisters. This one promises to be hotter than "hell". Bring on Chapter two.
Oh God, WHY Hillary, I often dream about twin gorgeous twins...But the name Hillary causes instant soft on's, nausea, revulsion, remembrance of noxious odors, instant fear for my life if I see her, worry about the economy, wonder about what else she sold to the Chinese Communists and worry that her asshole husband is going to jump out and try shove a cigar up my ass... AND I'M A GUY!!