All Comments on 'Cutting Loose Ch. 02'

I love Montana, especially that area around your mythical Promise. And I love this story.

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Great story. I would loved to have had a chapter with a 3 way in it. Also, I still haven't figured out why you hate the South!

Hope there is a part three. Seems like the Good Doctor needs a good fucking and then there are some of the town's mysterious secrets that need to be revealed. And of course, the court trial of Bobby Lee Harris, his subsequent escape from prison and his life getting even worse as he is taken to a more secure federal penitentiary where he is used as a sissy boy by the black prison gang and then knifed in the showers by the Hispanic prison gang is a must. And Dale cleaning up his act, getting to Promise, Montana and asking Jillian, his son and Eileen forgiveness for not being man enough over the years would put a cherry on top of this tale.

Love the story, so much promise for more chapters in this story, from a proper threesome sex scene between Roy Lee, Jillian and Eileen; to the secrets of Promise that the lady doctor hinted at; to the trial and incarceration of Bobby Ray; to maybe the redemption of Dale as he cleans up his act, finds out where his son and ex-wife is, comes and asks for their forgiveness and the forgiveness of Eileen for not doing more to stand up to Bobby Ray, this may include him turning on Bobby Ray and testifying against his former best friend.

The moment the shotgun over the mantle was mentioned in passing, I instinctively knew it would be the implement of Bobby Ray’s destruction.

In a creative writing text (or google) look up the term “Chekov’s gun”. It’s a reference to his play “The Seagull” where a gun is incidentally introduced early in the play and in Act IV it’s used in deadly force.

These days it’s used to identify an obvious trope where some object or character is introduced early that becomes essential later in the story/script/novel. These days, very seldom is “Chekov’s gun” as screamingly obvious as an actual gun!

This was a nice, heartfelt story (though filled with ridiculously stereotypical characters) that filled a few moments while waiting for a flight. Thank god, however, that I can speed read.

This story is a good start for a big series of stories, even if you maybe meant it for a two story arc. However, the arcs are not finished. Here are some ideas, some taken from previous posters...

1. Obviously more sex between the three, with the three moving into a larger home would need to be in a future chapter.

2. The secrets of Promise will need to come out, especially if there is more incest among other families in Promise, MT, other than with the Doctor.

3. The trial of Bobby Ray seems like a must for Chapter 3, where a reunion with a cleaned-up'd Dale could fit in as he is brought by the lady who served divorce papers to Bobby Ray while he beat the shit out of Dale as well as her partner to Helena, MT, where the trial would likely take place as federal kidnapping charges are among those Bobby Ray is being charged with.

4. Winter in Promise and how the population looks after each other during the Winter time, maybe in a chapter four or chapter five.

etc...

Everyone wants more so why not!

Hot sexy tale, more please. So much more to experience with these three sexy people.

Great story. Great women. Lucky bastard

REALLY!?! Nobody is going to comment on The Evil Dead Refrence?!?! Damn near made me slit out my drink! Could only have been better if they mentioned S-Mart, or Ashley J. Williams was missing a hand.

Ummm... that would be THREE COUNTS of attempted kidnapping, and I must agree with others that this one should continue with the people of Promise and the trial.

Great story, really enjoyed it. AAAAAA++++++

I really liked this story alot.

It ended to abruptly though.

Would have been nice to have wrapped it up completely . Not just end .

Keep on writing though... I like it...

Great story. Great ending!

Perfect story, perfect ending.

Fantastic story!! Done very well with a great finish. Thanks

Great damn story.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story.

Well written, entertaining story. Only thing I didn't like was disparaging Iowa cooking. At least we don't serve grits which is nothing more that sand that tastes like Brussel sprouts. : )

sorry i could only give it 5 stars , it deserves more !!