by scouries
Some parts were long "That was the mystery"
But most parts were excellent sexy and lucious.
I would like to have read a bout with your friends?
Fantastic, just long enough between the sexy parts to keep the interest. Sure would like to see more of this type of story.
thank you for an enjoyable story to read this morning, just enough to fulfill my desires and would love to read more of father/daughter relationships... very exciting and well written...will look forward to more stories. good luck and thank You ..
Nearly a five but I can never get my head around eighteen year old girls acting so babyish. Dialogue needs to be a bit more mature. I think using the word 'Daddy' so often is a big part of it.
Needless to say I need now to peruse the previous offerings.
Enjoyed your story and I am looking forward to others just like this. Keep on writing.
While incest doesn’t appeal to everybody, I found this story to be delightfully sensuous. People fall in love and in some cases the only solution is incest. Sad as this may be, who are we to condemn these unfortunates to a life of loneliness? Another fine tale Scouries, keep them cumming!
This was both sweet and erotic. I applaud your restraint, and your patience in building the tension between father and daughter. Do more!
You have done it again, with another romantic erotic story. Thanks.
A REALLY NICE LITTLE STORY . I'M NOT TOO SURE IF IT ALL MAKES SENSE BUT IT IS QUITE EROTIC AND KEPT ME ON EDGE .
KEEP WRITING .
There is enough racial hate in the world, you don't have to make up more false hate for the sake of your story. I am a white American, but see no reason for this tasteless beginning. It turned me off so, I stopped reading. Maybe your story is good, but your hate is not. A one rating from this reader.
Great story..
Will look for more from you..
Keep up the good work..
Ignore those ones that can't see the story for what it is..
Again Great Story
I thought it was the best story I have read yet! very erotic, and I love when the stories start out with some type of suduction-not just jump right in! will look for more great stories from you!
Racism. Nice. No, really, it's totally sexy it didn't ruin it at all for me.
Ugh.
Now I have to hit reset and start all over again, thanks.
I was intrigued with the story and have to say it was interestingly one of the best I have read in quite a while.
Why did you have to make such disgusting racist comments? I'm a white Christian Canadian and not only were your racial slurs disgusting, they are also extremely ignorant and show how poorly educated you are. I feel sorry for you if you think race can define intelligence, personality and even body odour! I don't know of any other race other than Arabs who have such huge proportions of their youth enrolled in engineering studies in university... one of the most challenging fields to study! Racism in any form shows a high degree of ignorance and lack of education on your part!
What kind of moron writes a negative comment about racism while reading a story about incest? Sorry folks, you can't have it both ways - you can't pick and choose your moral standards and expect others to respect anything you have to say. Fantasy is fantasy - and the bad guys are just as much a part of that as the incest...get off you high horse or go visit another sight.
there are aspects of your story that intruige me, the wantonness of the daughter, the inevitability of the father's submission but there are also things that it lacked.
1. I question the start of the story and would have liked to see some genesis of the feelings.
2. Where's the mother?
3. When the father succumbs to her it's through a yelling match and then presumably he acts with equal ferocity only to recant and say they had all night once she was in the bed?
All in all it's not bad but maybe that's what makes these things more frustrating.
the racial stuff at the beginning was a turnoff. The rest of the story, though, wow!
Erotic, sexy and fun! I would have liked more sex between them, although the initial fuck was excellent! As was her anticipation and build up.
nice story, but the racism turned me off.
and for your info, all arab men are circumcised. it is an essential part of being a muslim.
Good story when it finally got to where it was going. But really too much of nothing to get there.
I agree with the comments that it took too long to get to the sex, and not enough sex. I was hoping for more
In reading the other comments i realized the whole racism part failed to even compute with me. As a Nyer i can first and foremost say that unfortunatly after 9/11 it's a fear a lot of people have, and i appreciated the reality of that. With that being said i was in love with your story! I'm currently on my way to read more. I've never been in an incestious relationship and i've NEVER commented on a story but this really really intruiged me. Thank you and I hope you keep writing :)
The story was awesome, and to those who say it was 'ruined' by the 'racist' comments, I would just like to say "GROW UP, AND JOIN THE REST OF US IN THE REAL WORLD." Just about every country in the world holds great disdain for America, yet we are villified when we voice our opinions about the rest of you. Your disdain and hatred doesnt seem to stop all of you from moving here and enjoyings its freedoms, like freedom of speech, without which, you wouldnt be reading this story. Have you checked the chinese internet restrictions from the headlines lately? Everybody hates and fears someone else; don't slam a great story due to your intolerance for freedom of expression.
~If you can read this, thank a teacher.
If you're reading it in english, thank a soldier.
one of the best that I read in a very long time. Hope to see moor of you stories very soon
Scouries:
Glad to have you back again. As far as the accusations of racism, forget it. If the story had taken place in 1939 it would have been the Krauts who were the bad guys. 1941? The slant-eyed Japs. Since 9/11 its become the Arabs. Its a fact of life and a human frailty that we lump the guilty and the innocent into one group to intensify our anger for some grevious act or other. I can remember as a kid in the WWII years choosing sides to play war. One group would HAVE to play the "Jap" or the "Kraut" and they were expected to lose. That's the way it was. Regardless of age, race, or national origin, we all learn to carry our hate well.
As far as the lack of detailed sex, I'm afraid that comes from the pimply-faced teenagers who think you write stroke stories. Scouries, you are great at putting the sex into a story where it belongs and in just enough detail to draw the attention of the less then purient. Good job. Thank You. Ronnie w.
I enjoyed your story, which had enough romance in it to make me want to be "in it" and enough eroticism to make me real horny.. Thanks write some more
Thanks again for another hot story - It is always exciting to read another submission from you! Only criticism from me is that I too felt there was no need to bring in the Arab/muslim bit at the beginning. I found it stereotypically racist and unnecessary. But otherwise it was a pleasure to read and thank you.
It seems that the 'climax' of the story might have been more effective through a buildup of smaller "we almost did it" or "make out" sessions.
You have never failed to please me scouries. I wouldn't worry about all the racisism crap, and just do what we ALL know you can do, and that's write damn fine, hotter than hell, erotica. Just keep 'em cumming friend...
Just wanted to make a few observations:
One – I want to thank everyone who commented and voted - as of today more than 37,800 people have opened the story, 813 have voted on it, I’ve got 32 public comments and over 30 e-mails. This is more votes and comments than any of my other twenty-five stories have received – Thanks!
Two – re the accusations of racism etc. - In my story Steffi is trying to awaken her father’s fear of her violation and so obviously paints her imaginary attackers as vilely as possible. Remember, in today’s America the bad guy is the bearded, crazed, Arab terrorist. To think Steffi would use any other group in the context of the story is simply foolish. Lighten up everyone - fictional characters aren’t worried about political correctness.
How different people react to things?
It hadn't even occurred to me that there was anything racist in this - in fact the comments referring to racism completely baffled me.
What I read was a story I could lose myself in - I could "be" Steffi - feel her love and lust for her father; her excitement at making it happen; her fears that maybe she'd gone too far afterall.
Fantastic story, Scouries - your characters are believable; the battle between right and wrong - the settling for what feels right is great.
K
i came like three times just reading it dont know what i would do if i was the one actually in the story
This is the best story I've read on this site or any other. What a way with words. You built the story from a warm start to a crashing climax(no pun intended. If you don't do this professionally you should consider a change in carears!
What a great story. As to the racism comment cannot see what anybody is worried about agree with your comments 'what do fictional people know about it.' Keep up the good work+
i thought it was outstanding and very well put, i wish it had never ended, ohhh well
One of the best stories I have read so far.Keep up the good work.
masterpiece from the King of Incest. And the shameless pleading for the gratification of votes was just as impressive. Great job.
My daughter and I like your story have found bliss together.
Our sex life is unlike any other I have ever experienced.
We thouroughly enjoyed reading your story.
Thank you much!
Thoroughly enjoyed it, very well written. The suspense leading to the end was tremendous. An ace in my book, keep up the good work. Expect to see many more like it!!
The story was sexy and arousing. That's what most of us come to this site for. Well done. Keep 'em coming.
God!!!!! What a fabulous story. Absolutely one of the finest if not THE finest I have read here or anywhere else. I surely did not want it to end at all. Keep up the good work!!!!
LEMMELIKIT
a wonderful build up - sexy as hell - and a beautiful love... thanks
I think the only problem I saw was his rapid change of thought concerning sex with her. It should have been drug out a little bit longer. I would have enjoyed him struggling with the moral dilemma of the situation for awhile before taking her the way he did.
Though I never went to those places the characters were in, reading through the tale was like being there as a constant observer of their romance.
Good story, but try not breaking your arm while patting yourself on the back.
Was the little snippet about filthy, uncircumcised Arabs really necessary to the story? Or just an expression of your own beliefs?
It really didn't seem to serve any point in being there, except making your characters look like idiots.
...in this story: if you read those lines about Arabs and saw absolutely nothing wrong with that point of view, you need a few lessons in tolerance.
Authors have to strive for original stories and sometimes that means creating characters with some idiosyncrasies like being racist fucks. But if you don't think calling Arabs filthy is racist at all, you are a)racist and b)quite stupid.
In this case, it added nothing to the story and seemed to jump out and practically scream that this was the author's own ignorant opinion--whether it actually is or not, I don't know, but that's how it comes off to people who don't hate Arabs, just so you know.
I found the story good except for that, but I can see how someone would find it completely offensive garbage undeserving of any praise whatsoever.
an AUTHOR --- someone who conjures up an entire story, with dialogues, monlogues, etc. among its characters --- needs to be ABLE to tell the READER how or why a certain phraseology, term, or convention.
E.g.: two Asians joking about all kinds of racists remarks, including those against Asians, and have as much laughs about those Asian remarks as they have it when it comes to jokes about Polish or Irish drinking, MAY BE okay.
it'd be better if one is Asian, one is Irish/Polish. Then it is almost entirely okay; because the conversers are a mixed and every thing is fair game.
But not A FAMILY (parent/kid; siblings, etc.) making remarks about "those Arabs," "those drunkard Irish men", "those Italian mafiasco," et. --- especially if done in a PRIVATE (supposedly private) context (but somehow the "author" has privied us on hearing it,,,,
ANY THING is fair game; EXCEPT there has to be some intelligible and/or artistic CONTEXT (Note: even gangs, thieves, and insider stock traders who TAKE FROM folks,,, even THEY do not want to be taken from! so "any thing is fair game" can NEVER be an absolute phrase!! lol)
the socalled racest lines in the story were simply an
excuse for her to spend the night with her father because of a nightmare nothing happened in real life just her way
of getting to him no harm no foul just her way into the bed
and a good one at that nice work on the rest of the story
too loved it
It read well and there was so much happiness,,,, the way it should be. I found myself smiling often,,,
There should have been some of the good doctor's thoughts. Half of the story should be in his own words.
Wow, one of the most erotic stories I've ever read. Father/daughter is a "gray" area for me, but this story drew me in so deep, I am at a loss for words and was blown away. Awesome. *WOW*
I thought the sex was very good, mainly because you painted them both as very sexy people. My mind's eye could definitely picture those two fucking. And the buildup was good. I agree with other comments that the lines about Arabs were racist. Very racist, and completely unnecessary. When somebody writes something like that I can only believe it reflects something ugly in their own mind.
Uncircumsized Arabs, indeed! As good Muslims, most Arabs are circumsized -- just as 50 % of all Jews are! I realize, we needed a "fear factor" for Steffie's dream. Why get specific? Could have easily been "men" instead of "specific men". Could even have been boys in her community that she didn't like.
All that aside, the storytelling is excellent. The motions back and forth in time are somewhat confusing. But well done overall. Hope you write more for us.
This was a story that,Built up to a slow sexy start of a great relationship. It was teasing, I just think it was one of the best, I have red latley nice going
It was a very good story but I wasn't impressed by the Arab comments. They were racist and uncalled for. If you needed something scary in Steffie's dream then there was no reason for the racist comments about Arabs. Other than that it was a very good story but a bit of a long build but it seemed quite realistic.
This is a story of a beautiful love between two adults. One is a sexy, young woman and the other is an older man who happens to be her father. Well done!
Nookiehunter
Anytime a cock can fit into a pussy and make or not make a baby, regardless of relationships, if both want it done, then it should be free to be done.
have read through the other comments and although I am definitely not racist I believe that your comments were totally juastified.
Well done, you have woven a good story that is tightly knit, it flowed superbly for me. Thank you for your time and effort and sharing this story with us.
Peter
You are one of the best writers I have encountered so far, and you just keep impressing me!
As you know, I am already a big fan of yours, and I just had to leave you a comment here.
This story was superbe. Ok, maybe not quite as good as "mine", since that one was personal, but this one is deffinately HOT!
Thanks again for a great story, from your number one fan.
and a big hug to boot.
It was a ok story, Racist yes, but I found it a little slow moving, but really good build up...
but the ending seemed a bit rushed!
its hard to comment on perfection. a wonderful story. thank you.
my prick is in her panties
I mean my panties..
should be more with daddy doing their daughters
Story-Telling is a gift that all of us who
have studied oral traditions fear can be lost.
So, please keep on spinning,weaving the true
the false, and the merely bemusing.
Your story would have been decent if it weren't for the racist comments. There is no excuse. American is not the pinnacle of all that is wonderful and happy. Oh, and Christians who take part in incest and are therefore better than foreigners....there's an interesting comment. Keep your racist dick to yourself, asshole, then you won't raise any racist children.
Awesome. Just plain awesome. Like reading a true book, instead of just an erotic story. I give it a 10 on a scale of 1 to 5. Keep up the great work.
This is truly a work of literary value. The sex seems to be secondary and a natural part of the story. Simply, this a love story. Your writing is well done and easily kept me interested. I will be looking forward to reading more of your work. Thank you.
could not stop reading it was just beuitfull and agreat turn on look forward 2 readding more
Beautiful story. And I would like to say to those idiots complaining of racism....your morons...all of you, every last one of you are brainless fucks who need to simply shut your mouth, close the site, turn your computer off, -never- return, an move on with your life. Its a story, a character in a story will say what they want. And as someone else stated.....your hypocrites....you complain of racism in an incest story? Pick your morals, morons, you can't have both in one like that. Or come to terms with yourself. Im not a fan of the thing happening but the stories, I find them horribly arousing. That makes even me a bit of a hypocrite, but I've come to terms with that....now can you idiots come to terms with your stupidity? Its a story...grow up.....this person write beautifully....let it go and go beyond the world of a ranting baby in diapers you foolish little children.
fabulous story of love and passion between father and daughter ,well writin ,look forward to more
Wish you guys would leave the giant cock portion out of your stories---It gets BORINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG
PS--99 44/100 ths of women who have been fucked by a oversized dickey have been greatly disappointed.
I loved this story. I enjoyed it very much. Its a beautiful story and not at all like most father/daughter stories out there.
You're a very talented writer.
I loved the story. very sexy, and well written.
*a little off topic, but for anyone who said it was racist, don't dish out what you can't take. Americans take a lot of shit from you rag heads. Have some back. Not quite sure what your even on this site for anyways..shoulden't you be like highjacking planes or something.
It's nice to happen upon an actual "story" on here every now and then. I enjoy some of the ones that jump right to the sex, but more often, I like to see it all unfold and this one was perfect on that account. I also liked that 'Steff' didn't use all of the usual slang terms for body parts and unappealing desriptions of the sexual experience like some writers on here do in every story. In other words, thanks for not having him ram his "meat pole" into her "love canal"! Thanks again for a great read. I look forward to more from you.
-Lea
Great story. My only real beef is with the morons expressing their opinion on racism. Racism is wrong, no question about it. But to be honest, look where your arguing ethics. On an erotic literature site in an INCESTUAL story. Somthing that many religions frown upon. So lets be serious here; the characters are fictional, their beliefs are fictional and probably differ from the author's, the story is incestual, people are getting worked up about a story ON THE INTERNET. Hmm, does anyone else see how moronic the entire argument of racism is? Don't argue morals in an already frowned upon taboo story.
Excellent story, well written. The reason I come to a site with erotica is because I enjoy reading about sex and I don't want to wait to long to get to that part. This story was superbly seductive and I sense your feeling about the act but too long before the story aroused me. Thank you and I will read more of your work.
zaichuk516@yahoo.ca
Do not listen to the person who said:
Wish you guys would leave the giant cock portion out of your stories---It gets BORINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNG
PS--99 44/100 ths of women who have been fucked by a oversized dickey have been greatly disappointed.
This was an EXCELLENT story and as a woman I loved every part of it.
Your story was lovely. It was very well written with few mistakes which made it easy to enjoy. The plot was well conceived. I really enjoyed it. You definately have a talent. I've marked your handle down as one to watch for. Thanks for the enjoyable read.
You have a sincere talent in your ability to artfully express emotions without getting "sappy". I find your stories refreshing and tremendously sexy. Keep up the
good work, you might be able to get yourself commercially published some day.
This story a superb erotic conte of taboo between father and daughter. The consumation scene is very intense, tactile, and believable.
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HOWEVER, it utterly fails.
Why? The scene in which the "blonde" and "well-off" daughter sneeringly engages in that which Jean-Paul Sartre referred to as the racist construct of the dark "Other" was, is, and always will be revolting. American Racism is responsible for the ethnic cleansing and mass murder of tens of millions; the nation came into being and defined itself on an ideology of racism ( the notorious 2/3 clause); it imposed a racist dictatorship with respect to dark "Others" up until the landmark Civil Rights acts of the mid 1960s.
To those on this board who have the disgusting temerity to attempt the sophistry that since this is a board dedicated to erotica, ergo any moral argument has no merit is in itself an argument lacking in any merit, a sentient, conscientious being can only respond thus:
An ideology that lead to the enslavement, disenfranchisement, and the mass murder of millions is beyond the pale. This story, therefore, gets a ZERO. To excuse American Racism in the name of eroticism is to validate the erotics of evil and the bliss of a murderous ideology.
NO. NOT NOW. NOT EVER.
As to the Redstate swine who wrote the following, "a little off topic, but for anyone who said it was racist, don't dish out what you can't take. Americans take a lot of shit from you rag heads. Have some back. Not quite sure what your even on this site for anyways..shoulden't you be like highjacking planes or something," We will state without equivocation,apology, or regret the only possible response commensurate to the foul ignorance of the sentiment and its benighted "commentator" from whom such twaddle comes:
GO FUCK YOURSELF YOU STUPID REDSTATE RACIST PIG.
By your racist paradigm, then, we can say that if over a billion Muslims are "guilty" of what members of a terrorist group did, then ALL White people are GUILTY of what MILLIONS of them did: A history of GENOCIDE, PLUNDER, SLAVERY, and TERROR. News for you RAT BASTARD PIG---White Americans ALONE are responsible for murdering more humans than the entire Muslim world since the inception of the religion. ADD up the numbers: a genocide of Native-Americans here; the Atlantic Slave trade there; plunder and conquest of Mexico for its territory here; the formulation of Eugenics from which the Nazis would take such inspiration there; the fire-bombing and nuclear bombing of civilian population centres here, there, and everywhere, and by God, those "ragheads" have "only" tens of millions to kill before they catch up with all those "moral," and "sexy" Americans.
PIGS. WRETCHED, DISGUSTING PIGS you stupid, uneducated, ,provincial, and utterly HYPOCRITICAL Americans are. FUCK YOU. The world hates you as it does your "leadership,' and with good reason.
Now THAT'S "erotic."
Absolute "ZERO" for this story, and more more punishment to the defenders of the indefensible American PINHEADS to come.
Why don't you kill youself and make everyone happy you stupid prick. Looking for racism in an erotic story and then writing an essay about it will not bring back the countless dead you spoke of, nor will it make the prejudice from the past change. Tell your racist bullshit to the minorities who give a shit.
it was a good story but i was distracted by the fact there was underlying racism. What could've been given a 5 had to be a 4 as I will never condone any kind of racism.
I'm sorry....I loved the story. And I didn't see any racism....was it REALLY there? I doubt it. And please remember that you are reading a story about INCEST...and you are up in arms about an alleged racist remark? Please.
I gave your story a rating of 5. I thoroughly enjoyed the way you developed your characters. The only negative thing would be the HUGE cock. Why does there always have to be a huge cock that the woman is afraid of?
The story was wonderful. I was expecting the read rave reviews for this talented author. But instead, I read comments from readers that must have forgotten that this is Literotica! Is it possible for someone to be so insulted by an erotic story? Negativity begets negativity.
It was dark Daddy, so dark," I whispered, my lips just inches from his. "They attacked me Daddy, in a dark alley, three of them, they were so big, so ugly,... they hurt me Daddy," I added, whimpering now.
This story is very wonderful in its hot, drippingly sexy, and utterly compelling love scene between out-of-control father and sluttishly perverse daughter.
But the poster, Le Monde, is absolutely correct. This story and its author is racist to the core. So I give this story a zero to its core.
I see as well that there are quite a few racists and Conservative bigots out there swimming up the river de nial regarding the really repugnant racism at the core of the story. One of these bigots goes so far to ask, "Where's the racism?"
Well, we know now that said person is racist to the core, as he or she refused to see the Nazi/KKK racist imagery in the following passage, which would be obvious to a junior High school student who stays awake in history class:
"They were foreigners... Arabs I think, big, ugly, dirty men with long smelly beards. They wanted to rape me Daddy, despoil me because I'm an American.... Oh Daddy, they were so dirty and they made me do terrible things," I said, my body now trembling in his arms."
This is right out of KKK literature and the Nazis' rancid publications published by Julius Striecher: the imagery depicting the "Other" as "big, ugly, dirty," and as wanting "to despoil me [blonde woman, as in the racist "Birth of a Nation," "Turner Diaries," Volksher Boabachter et al]because I am a [White] American"
One does not have to attend history classes at Columbia University or La Sorbonne or read Critical Race theory by the likes of Derrrick Bell, Maryse Conde, Amos Oz, Eric Foner to acknowledge the imagery as boilerplate racism. It is the same racist imagery that "Whites" have used to depict Native-Americans, Africans/African-Americans, Jews, Southern Italian/French Catholics, Asians, and anyone else said "Whites" wanted to dehumanize by depicting them as (a) animals and (b)sexual predators and (c) vermin.
And "Whites" have engaged in this type of racist imagery t target "Others," for labour exploitation, plunder their lands, subordination, enslavement, mass murder, or some combination therein.
The "this-is-not-Sunday politics" is a Red Hering logical fallacy, and an especially putrid one, too. For, the incest fantasy involves ADULTS, both of whom are CONSENTING, and an assignation in which the ADULT,Ivy League-educated, Blonde daughter---who by definition has power as she is at the summit of America's unjust racial, economic hierachy---CHOOSES to seduce her father. The fantasy, dear sophist, is one in which both principals have AGENCY by dint of their racial status and wealth and age.
By contrast, those that White Americans exploited, plundered of their lands, discriminated against, enslaved (and raped), and outrright mass murdered did NOT have such power to make choices, or even fight back---until fairly recently, indeed.
We can only wonder what the "this-isn't-Sunday politics" would say if the depiction in this racist compte were turned around, and it was a Muslim, or say a Jew or an African-American who described ALL White Americans as "big, ugly, dirty" and "smelly" sexual predators. What might you say if 9/11 were justified because those "ugly, dirty" Christians "aren't successful" and rich, like say the Saudi Arabians.
Oh, boy, you would be howling like the albino rat whose tale is stepped on by one of those "darkies."
And let us not forget the wretched little racist who titles his rebuttal, "Stupid Mother Fucker." Well, sir, we really don't want to hear about your sole sexual experiences, one for which your mother surely charged you a rate higher than her regular tricks: ten dollars instead of the usual five.
Be this as it may, a refusal to contenance racism won'tt bring back the millions your kind murdered indeed.
But such a refusal to accept the racist dehumanization that made America's participation in the Atlantic Passage or the Nazis' genocide of the Jews will help ensure that "NEVER AGAIN" becomes a reality.
As to you, the true "stupid Mother Fucker," you may wish to believe that "only minorities" have any interest in standing against racism. But your precious "White" America is coming to an end, as immigration, assimilation, inter-marriage,and minority birth rates are making your White Uber Alles America a thing of the past.
Pray, oh "stupid Mother Fucker," that the Jews, the African-Americans, the Asians, the Africans, the Muslims who will be the majority---YOUR BOSSES, YOUR TEACHERS, YOUR POLICE OFFICERS, YOUR SON-IN LAWS, will treat you in so much more a humane and respecful manner than you and your benighted,stupid, and awful self-identified White peers treated them.
Because, you see, you "STUPID MOTHERFUCKER," the old appellation, "THE MAN," will soon be "EL HOMBRE."
And nothing is more the ironic justice served cold that such little White as yourself and the all-too-racist authors of "Whispering Daddy" will be cleaning the pools, mowing the lawns, raising the kids, picking the fruits, an grovelling on hands and knees before your future master, "EL HOMBRE."
Say your prayers, Mother Fucker, for this White Boy has long ago gotten over such fallacies as "Whiteness." And nothing will please me to see you serving US our Sangria at the big house of "EL HOMBRE."
It was really hot. I've read it three times in the last few weeks. I've loved it. Good work! Needs to be a movie.
Racist - hell, it was a nightmare. not an actual accounting of Arab characteristics. If it had of been a nightmare located in the Louisiana Biu. The men would have been smelly, unclean, uneducated Cajuns. And I hope the readers of this comment realize that Cajuns are neither uneducated, nor unclean, etc. Nightmares are like that - you stupid fucks - fear of the worst possible combination of features in you advesaries. Hell, I'm probably going too fast for you shitheads. Anyway, I loved your story and hated your reader's dumb-ass comments.
The arthor drug it out to much I got bored with it about the second or third paragraph.
I finished reading but the farther I got the more stupid it got.
Instead of the girl acting like she was 18 she acted more like 14 or 15,like some bitch (female dog)in heat for the first time,and just ould'nt wait to get fucked for the first time.
That's how the story affected me-a big stiffie, and I had to relieve it