by mypenname3000
WE... KNOW...LANA'S...NAME
There's no reason to continually use her full name after all of this time. If it was a person saying her name that would be one thing, a personality quirk, but to continually say her full name in narration is exceedingly annoying. You had stopped for a while and I thought you had figured it out that it was annoying, but apparently I was wrong.
At least now you're pushing along a plot and not just worthless pointless sex for the sake of sex. That's at least a plus.
These last three 'chapters' could have easily been merged into one actual chapter instead of spamming out 3.
As the other person said, it's odd to keep saying her full name.
But overall enjoyable story!
You've managed to find a nice balance between sex and plot.
Keep up the good work!
I'm waiting for the next chapter. 😌