by meelana
I didn't realize how short these chapters would seem once posted, I apologize. I will try and see about an editor, but I suspect it will delay things even longer. This is my first submission, so I thought it would only take 72 hours to post, but it appears to take 6 days. The next chapter will be longer but will likely not put until next week since I am submitting it today.
Just as good as the first. Just keep submitting until you find a editor. Most of us can deal with a few small mistakes without it ruining the story. I look forward to the next chapter.
Don't worry about length - write what "feels right" for a chapter, and post. If you try to write longer for the sake of writing longer, you'll disrupt the flow, and the way you have it is fine.
Keep writing, this is fun!
I'm really enjoying this - don't let us rush you or influence you, you're doing this just right, all by yourself. So far, all the characters are likable, with loads of potential for a great story ahead. Thanks!
(If you want a proofreader, give me a shout.)
I'm loving this story!!! Don't rush yourself take your time
great start...i agree longer chapters would be great. I wonder how you will work out the fact that she is married and is the mate of the alpha?
For a pack that owes her family a major debt, they certainly are eager to lie to an manipulate her.
Another very good update. I agree that the chapters could certainly be a bit longer, unless your plan is to write shorter chapters and update very frequently. I do like the way you're slowly developing your characters and giving us a chance to get to know them. Hopefully, you'll continue to flesh them out for us.
I still feel very strongly that you need to get yourself an editor or a proof reader. There were several mistakes in this chapter that made some things unclear and difficult to understand.
That said, I am excited to see how the Alpha's first meeting with his mate goes and how he'll react to finding out that his mate has been abused and hurt by her husband. It should make for very exciting reading!!!
Amazing wonderful.I love it and can only hope you update soon again.
Thanks.
She is going to fight Brendan left and right. Amelia is very prideful and want to do things on her own. It's understandable but pride is not going to pay the bills or feed her. Nothing is wrong with accepting help, she can always pay them back. She is not going to get involved with men for a while since she is married and John abused her. I imagine John and Amelia will cross paths again.
Think you should describe your characters a bit, just enough so we have a mental image. It doesnt have to be the sterotypical way.
This is fun and I like the build up, please keep it coming. You're about to be very popular on this site! I can feel it happening already. DW
I am loving your story so far but please please make your chapters longer!!! Cant wait for the next installment!!!
A very good start,,,love the story line,,,longer chapters would be a big bonus if possible,,Thanks....
You're doing very well. My only complaint though is if you could make your chars more descriptive and edit a bit more because few of your sentences don't make sense.
Curious how you are going to handle the mating pull of the Alpha vs the legalities of getting a human divorce and her apparent southern raising and decorum. Her determination of working stuff through is a strength of character and also a point of weakness at the same time.
Keep up the good work.
Chapters 1 & 2 are a good start. Please keep writing.
Really liking the story and would like to read more. Each chapter has been so short ... more please.
This is a very good start yet I'd like to see the chapters longer. If you may have ended it BH the alpha Introducing himself and Amelia explaing the necklace it would ha e been a better twist. But very good....make longer chapters though
There was some weird formatting of the speech when the Alpha was talking... but other than that, great!
The length of chapters 1 and 2 combined would be perfect for the next chapter. They are a bit short on their own but I read them back to back and it was fine.
Really looking forward to reading what comes next. I do hope the chapters are a little longer in the future though.
I am working to make the chapters longer. Like I said, they seemed much longer when I was writing them. In a standard word document chapters 1 & 2 covered the equivalent of 15 typed pages, so I thought that was plenty. I am also going to try and write several more chapters and submit them all together. I have found an editor, but that means there is a delay in posting because the editor has to review send back to me and then I post and it takes about a week from the time I submit it to the time you see it. I do appreciate all the feedback and the ratings.
While a bit predictable, as actually all the werewolf romance stories of course, it still is very charmingly written. I like how you wrote the characters.
So I hope very much to read more soon.
And I hope very much, that this is going to be one of the rather rare stories that actually get finished, too ;-).
About chapter length, I honestly don't mind wether there are more frequent shorter updates or longer less frequent ones.
Lovely story that is full of depth and well written.
Take your time. We will wait for the next chapter.
*****
I love it can't wait for more. I don't think I've heard a were story where they owe a human family a debt. Keep the chapters coming very well written
It was very nice that this chapter was much longer than the first. So far I am liking how you handle werewolves and that she isn't freaking out over them. I really can't wait to see more of this story and hope something gets posted soon.
Grrr... I really hate waiting for new chapters for stories that I am liking. Now for a shameless plug I have a werewolf story I am working on that you might find interesting. 5 stars for you.
I am really enjoying the story, a great start, please keep the chapters coming. Nice pace and character development. Good story line so far, looking forward to more.
Yes! YEs!! YES!!! I LOVE that she’s his mate! I was Hoping she was and YAY!!! She is!! Unfortunately I am all Too familiar with DV problems and saddened it has been the case for her but she’s home now and he will DEFINITELY protect her! You’ve made me SO HAPPY! I WISH the story was longer but I will take what you’ve written, I have no other option But to do so!! 😉🙃 Him scaring her oops! Understandable when one finds their mate they HAVE to be where they are! Thank you for your story and your time! Hope you have a wonderful day!