by entirelybs
A mother always knowsโฆ ๐๐๐คญ๐คท๐ผโโ๏ธ๐คท๐ผโโ๏ธ๐ฉโ๐งโ๐ฆ
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Great start to what promises to be a hot story. Well done for your first submission. I am keen to read more of what this family get up to and wonder which one will be knocked up first.
Has great potential to expand into a a great future. Remember most readers wont read more than 4 pages. Keep it moving, keep it hot and let your imagination run wild.
Concept was okay. I like how you got rather quickly to the sex. However, I'm not a fan of pissing on someone, and mom's agreement was a bit too soon and easy.
If you write another chapter, please give consideration of detail for Jack. I know his cock is a modest 7 inches, but give that young man a dusting of sexy chest hair for his muscular, manly chest. A sexy sight on a young man!
A beautiful and erotic story of love.
Great story! Really well written dialogue and a promise of more good things to come. 5*s
ended too quickly, it should be left as to be continued and remove the pissing and let it be as his sister's ejaculation.
Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a pale of cum from each other. Then in came mom and they fell down, but Jack didn't crack his crown. When he looked around it's what he found that brought him back to his feet. Jill had his meat in her hand and mom hand her pussy over his mouth. Ha Ha !!!! Keep writing I liked your story gave it 4 stars so far. Reader in Florida
Jack and Jill went up the hill, each with a buck and a quarter.
Jill came down with two and a half, still think they went up for water?
Sound like a very understanding mum. Son and daughter screwing and she doesn't blow her top
Interesting premise.
Sex too rushed. Too automatic.
Needed more preliminaries/foreplay before going at it so strongly.
Her mom told her to use her hands and mouth. Did she give any instructions? What? Why didn't he ask his sister to tell/show him what their mother had suggested? And then try those things step by step?
Four stars.