by Shadowsung
I like how the story pulls you in fast and furious, then keeps you there; wanting to know what happens next. Little bit on the short side, but I can see a lot of potential for longer chapters. Great start, to hopefully; more of this story.
Really good start to what could definitely be an interesting read hoping to see more soon. This story has great potential, I can't wait to see where your heading with it...
awesome start, grabs the reader and holds them there! please continue writing :)
I really liked the beginning, but would like a whole lot more, please keep going.
This is definitely a good start. I like the dual perspective you bring to the story, giving it a depth that a single perspective wouldn't. Color me intrigued.
That's what you are, a tease....More, I want more. A great start. Please continue.
I love both your starts to what are obviously longer stories..please keep writing
I liked the begining and hope you dont intend to leave her on the floor of the alley. I was shocked the wolf ran away and was happy to read him come back as it did not seem like a were would leave the woman undefended. Looking forward to chapter 2
Fascinating beginning to this story. I do hope you plan on continuing on with this story... I'll be waiting for the next installment
You gave just enough of the story to make me want more, more as in more chapters, more as in longer chapters and more as in don't make me wait long. I will be watching and waiting for chapter 2.
Very nice; so far so good! I'll be among those who'll be checking for your next installments! Cheers.
This was fantastic, you should definitely continue. Great to read, and now I've got to try and be patient for your next part... it's gonna be hard to have to wait. :)
Looking forward to the next bit, I want to know how Ally will react to her furry companion and if Paul gets his just desserts.
I second what others have said - i will be on the watch out for further, longer chapters
I'm interested in more. I wouldn't mind a longer chapter the next time, either :)
Not another cliffhanger!<br/>
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Seriously, write more on this one, you've just set a good start to a story but you've also stated that you are trolling around story beginnings. <br/>
Beginnings are good, but only if they get middles and ends!<br/>
If you post too many beginnings before middles are seen, then people will stop even looking to see if it is a middle. You'll be the girl that cried "wolf" too often, ignored when a full story really comes along.<br/>
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Don't sell yourself short, write a middle, follow it with an end.<br/>
Any fool can write a beginning, I can write a beginning. Take it to the next level - write a middle.<br/>
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-ShadowedDreams
You can't leave it there and i doubt that you have, you just wanted to see if people liked the story.
Well i know i do so bring on the next chapter
Thanks for all of your comments-
I have just submitted the next chapter for this story, so it should appear in a couple of days.
I tried to make the chapter longer, but I am a naturally short story/chapter writer, it seems...
I love a strong Heroine and an even stronger Hero! Please continue writing!
well, i do like the way you write. In ur other story i cried on each chapter. Thats showing how good u r 2 captivate us, or me w ur words. This series is good but when a writer decks all d secrets upfront, usually d end will be soooo far. And if d series r long, i hope u r patient w urself ya, since i will wait n wait for d next chapter - nee
because I'd just gotten to Ch5 of you other story (A Wolf's Tail) and I know you've got that on hold.
First chapter in to this and I'm hooked. It's a violent introduction for the hero & heroine of this piece but it sure shows their good traits. I like it.
Off to chapter 2.
lovin' it so far! a bit of an error saying 4 guys attacking her then 5 and back to 4, but it was still very good.
"galleon-of-ice-cream-a-day"
Hyperboles. Awesome. If it wasn't a misspelling, that's even better!
Nice beginning. Using words like "private parts" makes you sound a little young though.