All Comments on 'Saturday Night Five Ch. 01'

Very erotic! Every young man's dream!! Education is to be enjoyed...keep it coming, pun intended! LOL.

HOT AF!

Great start, more please!

Give us more of his growing into being a male adult. Great buildup!

Very hot! Interested to see how you continue this story.

Well, you certainly got into the head of your main character - the story really reads as though it were written by a virgin nerd. That is not a compliment. It's so tiresome reading about these incredibly intelligent wimps who have to wait for the hot girls to make the first moves (and the second moves, and the third...) You would think a bright, enterprising young man with such opportunities staring him in the face would take some initiative, do some basic research on what it takes to interest and please a young lady and make some moves on his own. But no, they just sit there simpering until the girl takes the responsibility and the momentum to move things along. This kid is supposed to be intelligent - give him a chance to use his best weapon! Average story, average number of stars.

Absolutely fantastic.

Great story! Please keep this going though, would like to see some payoff with the rest of the girls. More on the five girls too - details, personality traits, etc.

Think you have a really great set up here, keep going!

This story was great! Please continue the story! I've read similar stories but your was way better. Keep it going

I loved it! More please.

@LitCrit Thanks buddy!

Really enjoying the read.

Don’t worry about the reviewer complaining the intelligent guy should make the first move.

If he was experience with girls, he wouldn’t be scared an uncertain on what to do, thus his story.

Please keep writing, I enjoy the stories where the guy respects the women and learns about life along the way.

It was an OK story, but from my point lf view it is pretty much a copy of a story on here called Bosom Buddies.

Didn't like it. They are taking advantage of him.

Ignore those who say it’s a copy of Bosom Buddies. As someone who absolutely loved it, I’ve been dying to see another version of it. The Lion King was basically Hamlet but I didn’t complain about it either.

Great story, good set up, I like the character dynamics, looking forward to more

Overall not a bad opening chapter, but more like a prologue than an actually chapter one.

There are definitely some grammar issues but I’ve read through all chapters now and I’m so glad I didn’t stop after one chapter.

You’ve done a fantastic job in bringing these characters to life. No character is ‘perfect’ but I think that’s what helps make this story more realistic. Keep writing!

The MC poking fun at someone because their not as smart is worse than them calling you nerd.

Your supposed to be the smart one, yet you choose to be one what you despise, instead of choosing to be the better person.

That's 2 stars for me.

Some grammar issues, but other errors are worse. The Mississippi runs north-south, so you can’t be south of it. You’re either east or east of it. Also, vodka does not have a strong odor, which makes it less detectable on someone's breath than other types of alcohol.