by Rumple Foreskin
Good use of emotions, but could use a little more of that. Firstr time stories are always hard to write because they've been done so often. I loved the story, just felt that it need a little more 'umph' if you know what I mean. Keep writing.
Hm, maybe I should consider changing sides? LOL
I liked the story and wouldn't mind being seduced like that.
Good luck.
heated up the cold weather with this wonderful and HOT HOT tail...I meant tale...<grin>
great story~
Happy Holidays and good luck~
Art~
I almost felt like I was there with the girls and I'm a guy. They were great topgether. I wish I could have joined them.
wow! i loved your story. keep writing, please.
(my girlfriend loved it too)
wow i loved it this one made me very horny like the girls in this story and im a girl
Marvellous story, a lot of heat in a very short time, I love that. I was just kind of missing the Christmas/Winter feel during the main part, could have been any college, any time of year. What made this a christmas story for you?
Keep writing though, it was perfectly hot nevertheless!
Very enjoyable, makes me wish I was back in college with my roommate spread eagle in front of me so I could lick her delicious pussy. Yummy, thank you for making me so wet.
... will stick anywhere NEAR this story. It sizzles! Could be a bit more holiday-ish, though.
as of 11/15 anyway. Better written then most, but I'm afraid any lesbian story bores me to tears. Remember that infamous Wendy's jingle....WHERE's THE BEEF?
This is your version of ‘The Little Matched Girls Play With Fire.’
Am I right, RF?
This almost burnt up my monitor! Guess who would have paid for a new one? Great work RF and good luck!
of quality we have come to expect from you. Goodluk with the contest :)
-Colly
First holiday contest I've read thus far-this was great-really nice descriptive writing-none of the cliche stuff-excellent job!
Hotter than chestnuts roasting on an open fire....woohoo,you write good girlie stuff, are you one of the AH's honorary lesbians???
After reading that, I wanna be a lesbian LOL
Hot, saucy stuff there RF!!! Well done ;-)
Well written and hotter than most anything I've read recently.