by Britease
a story by a Literotica OG.
Cute twist, good story. Thanks for posting.
And there wasn't a lot of the story, so it got to the punchline rather quickly.
I liked it.
Lue
I did not see that coming. You set.up.your.punchline perfectly. Good one!
Nice little plot flip. Good to see a story from you. Thanks, Randi.
Here was I hating the wife who treated the husband like crap only to find out the mother was the slut.
Love your work.
For me, you're just the best writer in this category. It is always a treat to read one of your stories.
This one is quick, simple, and with a really nice twist. 5*
Please, write more...
the wild one should, at least, attempt civility to understand the seriousness, TK U MLJ LV NV
It's is good to see kids raised properly doing the right thing. Nice short story. More, please. Thanks.
Nice story with a good twist. It is good to see you publish here again. Please keep it up.
It was His Mum not His Wife..Silly Me..5 Stars ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!
For the "It was his mother" twist.
Don't know if it would have helped or hurt to have a "mother" tag.
Great twist didn't see it coming . Thanks for a good laugh with my ☕
Silly me. A half page of surface fluff with no effort put in to make it a good story. The plot was good but the writer was lazy.
Good job...ignore the pissing and moaning crowd. They've no sense of humor.
You are the best at showing that flash stories can be just fine.
Very funny! I never saw it coming. Surprised I haven't read more from the children's POV.
Enjoyed the story and the twist was a great move
But if his bitch of a mother is left with nothing,
where is she going to stay?
Did you forget that problem, Britease? ;).
Otherwise a nice little ditty.
4 out of 5 from me.
Always great to read a story where the kids aren't shielded from knowing that one of their parents is an adulterer - that's one of those weird tropes that rarely happens outside of LW.
At the end of it all, though, I don't know why the MC even bothered here - I guess the 'talk' he was about to have with his mother was more about the relationship between them, going forward, and less about saving her marriage, since I strongly doubt his father would have changed his mind about dumping her ass anyway.
Hey - two stellar flashes in a row, today! We rarely get such abundant offerings, nowadays, around here, so I truly appreciate it, author. Cheers.
Always good to see a new Britease story. I would have liked something longer but this worked well and I really liked the twist. Mom the slut! Clever. Thanks for the effort.
4 stars
I didn’t have enough time to read another tale
right then, but started it anyway!
I got to the finish much sooner than I thought ...
I loved the twist AND didn’t have to ‘bookmark it!
5*
Perhaps it's late in the day and I'm having problems concentrating. The hubby and wife go to dinner and he leaves while she begins her whoring with the other men at the restaurant. Then we shift to the son and his wife. Was the son at the restaurant and not hubby?
I'm sorry, I really love your other stories. But this one was way too short, too quick, and full of questions. You've got potential with this STORY, but as is...no go. Suggest you take pen in hand, expand the plot, and do some serious character development and exploitation. As is, it's nothing more than a movie trailer.
Very disappointed. Was expecting more from you.
Not a story, not even a flash story.
What was the point?
The husband was never present in this story, only mentioned.
It's the son that went to dinner with his slut of a mother.
Seems quite obvious... you probably were too tired to catch it.
'Wouldn't be a bad idea to re-read it.
Very nice twist at the end. Of course the cheating parent can't understand or comprehend why their children might be upset with their actions...Silly Me :)
I was building a good rant for a comment when the twist caught me. Good job 4*
that little ditty flashed across the night sky and lit up the universe.
A great one. Too bad about mom. (lol)
Jedd Clampett (carvohi)
I appreciated the way you “brought us in” to this rather simple, but unexpected twist. Very cool. Thanks
Wayne
5***** all the way. I am honestly jealous and I wish that I had written it. It's very, very good.
The story was fine, I just have a personal issue with repeated phrases ... silly me
Hummm ... one calling his own mother a "bitch" can only deem the caller a "son-of-a-bitch".
My ... the wonder of it all.
I did enjoy the cautious twist during the read but the overall story could've been much more enticing with additional meat.
Agree the MC is a self described SOB, but at least he's not a motherf**ker. Things can always be worse.
you had me going. Was honestly thinking "what a wimp" for most of the story until you did the reveal and suddenly that wimp became a giant.... a giant of a son who went in one last time to try and save his mother from herself. Its amazing what perspective can do. Truly a masterpiece.
Really nice twist. That was pretty unique. Have to give that a 5. Short, sweet, no waste and a big twist. What's not to love?