by DreamCloud
Nice twist thrown in this morning. And the tension bumps up several levels. Nicely done.
So very captivating. Great charecter development and motivation. Looking forward to where this is headed. Finding it difficult to wait for new chapters.
Your character development paints a clear picture in my mind's eye. Moreover, I like your characters; which is an absolute necessity for me to enjoy the story. It also helps to have such a great plot! 5 stars.
Each chapter gets better. These characters are very fascinating.
I have never commented before finishing a story, but I am enjoying this so much that I though I should. I am quite amazed at where this story has gone so far and I am sure that Jayden is going to end up with someone at the end. I thought I knew who at the beginning but now I am not so sure.
Yoshi
Exciting also. No idea how this will end, but hoping for the best for these characters.
Sad, really sad ending for Pat...
Maybe new horizons for Jayden, Bev and Susan?
5 * stars for you.
I apologize for my English (yet and forever), isn't my native language.
(revisiting some favorites) If I remember correctly, the tire replacement was a Sunday (morning) job. Jayden rolled into Evansville "just before the dinner hour" later that day. After stopping for a steak, he encounters the unmarked UPS truck making a delivery "as night began to fall". It strikes me that pretending to make a UPS type delivery on a Sunday night would have been pretty stupid cover for any professional hitman. Now, if it had been a pizza delivery truck, that scene could play out pretty much as written (minus clipboard). Hell, you wouldn't even need a truck. A car with removable "Joe's Pizza!" signage would fill the bill and be a lot easier to acquire/convert/dispose of.
Still going and still fun the second time around and once again Kudos to our editor who spent more time on the story than did our author.
Unfortunately a number of spelling and grammatical errors spoilt this, a good storey otherwise. ⭐️⭐️⭐️
The justice couple forages on to find the self centered and very selfish father. Onward..........
I'm amazed at the imagination and serendipitous adventurous tale thats a bit of a novel 'buddy' romance. (Like a hit man's 007?)
Author has 'heart' and compassion, which is unusual for a professional 'mechanic'. ('just the facts, ma'am...)
Tale of an assassin with a heart of gold and an amorous dispensation. Never backs down from any encounter, killing or drilling, so long as it's instigated by the opposite party. Great story so far.