All Comments on 'The Pleasures of Submission Ch. 01'

But please get an editor. Considering the frequent missing letters, transposed letters and misspelled word(s? Only noticed one glaring misspelling.), I dropped your score by one star.

If you can't find an editor, review each word, starting at the end and work forward. This forces you to actually look and see each word as it is, rather than your mind just seeing what it expects to see.

... more is better ;-). Glad this first chapter was long, not a tiny bit boring. Surely beats those short stories at first totally unlikely pairings, with instant conversion to perpetual love on first kiss, grope or spanking ...

Hope for many sequels. Thanks and all the best.

I like the slow seduction, getting into her head. Very good start, looking forward to the next chapter.

I'm not going to complain about misspelling or any other errors. I am going to congratulate you for writing a story that shows the art romantic seduction and dominance goes hand in hand. I've read a few stories that seem to forget that a true natural Dom controls and dominates with seduction. Great story looking forward the next chapter. And please keep it long and seductive. Five stars

I fucking love this storyyy. Can't wait for the 2nd chapter😥

Don’t worry it wasn’t long at all

The build up, and story was fantastic, mingling the two worlds, and showing the conflict between cultures was very well done.

However, the spelling, and grammar needs work, and look forward to seeing improvement Dee! ;-}

This Black girl is really enjoying this story. Great character development and built up. I agree about the technical editing needed, but the narrative is very well constructed. Really got me wet. Thanks!

Great writing! I love the way you draw us into your character's psyche, struggles and attraction. Well done.

Wonderful! Realistic and hot! Patrick is the kind of Sir I am, - only better. :)

And Dee is just the kind of sub I really go for!