All Comments on 'The Successful Woman Pt. 01'

The story is good but it is funny that you mention "a spam reply with grammar and spelling errors" and your story is so full of spelling and grammar errors that it almost too difficult to read and enjoy. Please seek out an editor and continue.

Thank you for writing and posting here.

Thanks for the feedback. I am very much an amateur writer. Will try improve for chapter 2!

'Failedscout' 's comment is liks so many on Literotica,they can't wait to point out a new contributor s faults.I would say to 'iluvtoserve' ' good effort,you have grasped the basic idea of what is hot.

Good start can't wait to see the humiliation and financial ruin he will go through

Of course, because any real domme would totally just start using tools ans items on a person without going over or negotiating a contract. No mention of set time limit or safe word just wip the cage out and go from there, why bother or try making it realistic.

Also, you kept making the same grammatical errors within the first paragraph. If you aren't willing to edit or spend the time to go back through your work at least get grammerly or something similar. It'll help you slightly.

Really good start to the story. I will be interested to see where you go with this. And, please, don't let naysayers dissuade you from continuing. Some people just don't understand that fantasy is fantasy and not EVERY story needs to be 100% realistic. I think this is a very strong effort.

great start, waiting chapter 2..

Please stop with this kind of generic plot, please.

great start!!

Now that he's locked she begin financial draining him.

Pleeease chapter 2.

please continue with more chapters