by Angela_Leibach
I enjoyed the way you draw a picture for the reader. Great job.
It was really good, I'd love it if you expanded the story, and built up their relationship from the beginning a bit, maybe have a few more chapters with a few flashbacks, as what you have here is good but there's not that much detail, as you've gone through about 10 years in one page, i think it could be great if you took the time to flesh it out a bit. I'll definitely look to see what you write in the future.
To see where this goes...I hope this isn't the end, but a beginning. Your style is really good and I enjoyed the read immensely. Hope to see more from you! DW
I absolutely loved it. Normally I do not comment on other stories but for this one, I will make an exception.
I would love to read a sequel or something to this story. I love the plot and the setting of it. It's not very often I find an erotic story that grips me so. When reading this, I seeked not to arouse myself, but to immerse myself in the story. A young girl who has been training with a master swordsman for years ends up giving the very one she trained with her virginity.
This is so much better than Twilight! (I had to squeeze a meme in here somewhere)