All Comments on 'Their Special Place'

by Corny1974

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JohnAmalfi4104JohnAmalfi41044 months ago

Short and sweet. Good stuff, great last line.

AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

The moral of this story? If you write 'WELCOME' across your forehead with a sharpie then lay down outside your front door you will be used as a doormat. I've read so many stories here where MCs not only allow but actively encourage their wives to treat them this way then get all fired up and angry when they do. I can't get my head around it but at least this MC saw the light, albeit belatedly.

Dalton402Dalton4024 months ago

That was great flash fiction but it left me wanting more. What happened next?

AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

Great story. You do have to fill in some blanks like why no divorce etc as it has been a year.

inka2222inka22224 months ago

4.5 stars. You lost half a star for him not noticing the other women. I HATE HATE HATE that trope. Otherwise, a brilliant and well written 750 LW.

HarleyRider1955HarleyRider19554 months ago

This is the problem with most 750 word stories. There is a tantalizing scent from the kitchen, yet nothing is being served. These are hollow stories that hopefully will be expanded on by a more generous author. 4 stars for trying.

AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

This was good for a short story. The problem with these 750-word stories is that the good ones universally leave me wanting more.

TheMTOneTheMTOne4 months ago

This can be summed up as "Not a bad start."

Not everything needs to be 750 words. It doesn't need to be 75,000+ either, but sometimes finding a good middle ground is ideal, no?

chytownchytown4 months ago

*****750 and a real GEM!!!!!! Thanks for sharing.

BulldogfortyfourBulldogfortyfour3 months ago

This needs several 750 words chapters !

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AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

This needs more. Please make it happen. Solid 5 as a starting point.

xMulexMule3 months ago

4*

Like that the changes in their special place reflected the changes in their relationship.

AnonymousAnonymous2 months ago

Needed a little more in your face bitch but well written.

VeracityHeterodyneVeracityHeterodyne2 months ago

There really is no virtue in having a 750-word story, if it is not complete. Add another 100 words and you could have had twice the story.

KRD19254KRD192542 months ago

Set a tend, make a 750 Part2 then Part3 then Part4. You could have some fun with this story.

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Nice to read he grew some balls.

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5*, Hooyah, Salutes for Part 2 "the burn".

hindsight2020hindsight20202 months ago

Needs another chapter.

AnonymousAnonymous2 months ago

That's it?

AnonymousAnonymous21 days ago

Ditto to Pt.2!

cyendreycyendrey12 days ago

A great prologue. Now we need tge rest of the story!

Oatmeal1969Oatmeal196911 days ago

really good set up for the word count. now expand on it and see if she can win him back, but with her groveling and him taking control of the relationship... if it will survive.

how long was this hall pass/separation that he grew a beard? Or is it based in Greece and it's narrated in real-time ha ha

AnonymousAnonymous10 days ago

Felt incomplete.

mndhanson017mndhanson01710 days ago

Um what infidelity?

AnonymousAnonymous10 days ago

mndhanson017 what story have you read? It's quite obvious she has asked for an extended hall pass before returning to him.

Sounds like there was lots of infidelity to me.

AnonymousAnonymous9 days ago

Wow! Great story for staying under 750 words. Maybe for those that don't get it, you could have said, "Smiling, he told the waiter to bring him a beer; then set the manila envelope before her."

AnonymousAnonymous4 days ago

I agree with the comment below, this was incomplete. Because of that only 2 stars

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After reading lots of stories on this site, I decided to try and write one myself. Please be kind, I'm not a writer but I do enjoy a good story.