by fieryjen
the only comment that i would say is negative, is the use of the same word over again, when you were describing the vibrator, it would have been more descriptive to use a different word each time, rather than "thing". some of your other descriptions were quite exquisite and i enjoyed the tense feeling that you created. very good.
LOVE shower scenes. The fact that he took you somewhat roughly is exciting, and erotic. Thanks for the imagry!
Erotic and full of lustful anticipation. Wonderful story!