All Comments on 'Triad Ch. 01'

This reads like a new twist on the old "Three Musketeer's" story. I see they're in it as equals, so far. Like Aurora, I was wondering if it was gonna get "gay" ~ and I am so glad it didn't. I wonder how well you can write this tale. Reading Ch. 01 is like reading the back cover on a novel.

I like the way you write. It's easy going, pleasant, and has insight. If I were you, I wouldn't change a thing. The story now ~ if this is fiction ~ might be a tougher nut to crack. I say that because, if this is a true story, it almost writes itself. As the reader; I feel like I'm "in the moment" ~ so it "feels" real. Thanks for writing so well.

Can't wait for more...

My one big suggestion is to use something other than quotation marks for the inner dialogue, italics is often good for that , or a new paragraph starting with a hyphen. The quotes are confusing, and took me out of the story several times.