All Comments on 'Vanessa's Tale'

Short and sweet

A man's low self esteem, and failure to see what someone saw in them, or the worth they held in their eyes allowed them to believe the gossip, the lies behind the rumor mill. Shows how great things can fall apart with one minor thing misinterpreted and blown all out of context.

Rather infantile.

It's funny, you think your know the truth until you see (or read) the other side. This shows that perception is everything. Good read, thanks!

It's certainly realistic, but it ends so abruptly I feel cheated.

Is there a part 2?

I'd love to see a part two and from the looks of comments, I'm not the only one. I really like what you have so far.

To answer a few questions about the story it was short because I wanted it to be to reflect the brevity of their relationship. It was Vanessa's decision to go over the top kissing the guys. She kissed her uncle because she was excited and happy. It wasn't the mind blowing kiss that Carson thought she gave him. From his point of view that's what he saw. Does it really matter who started the rumours? People who start them are usually jealous or see what's not there. The truth is what a person believes from their point of view to be true.

This story is similar to another story in this contest. The story in which the nerdy boy fell in love with the southern girl who did him wrong on Valentines day. She was sleeping with the boss and she got a promotion and said it was just business. Oh yeah the story I think is called " Over a piece of Pie" I believe. But great story although the ending is sad.

Yes i wrote them both. Glad you liked them

I've read both of your stories about Carson and Vanessa. I must say I liked the other one much better. It seems to me unrealistic that Vanessa would carry on an extended relationship (I know you have said it was brief) but she also comments how they dated for some time) without him ever knowing that her family owned the company. Possibly she didn't want anyone to know, but all she would have to do after he accused her of being a whore, was to tell Carson that the boss was her uncle.

Yes it should have been as simple as her telling him her relationship with her Uncle, the CEO. At that point in time Carson was still very insecure about himself and had low self-esteem. He saw what he thought he saw and felt hurt and betrayed. Would things have been different if he'd given Vanessa a chance to explain what had actually happened? Quite probably, but then he never would have met Skye. Sadly for these two star-crossed lovers their own insecurities were their downfall, Vanessa compensated for her shyness by being over-the-top forward and Carson retreated into his protective shell. How many relationships actually fail because of these same problems?

I found this very depressing to read. Not a bad story at all, but depressing nonetheless.