All Comments on 'Shy-cue'

simple poem says a lot.

But this:

Goddess of desire

fulfilled in filling pumps

innocence disappear

Could be tweaked a bit into perfect. Thanks for the read!

Syn~

nice erotic Haiku, you are not shy? <grin>

the shy approach can be even more revealing than a bolder one.

Interesting style here.. simple complexity both in the style and in the subject... A felt a floating with the read.. and the essence of all who held the innocent candle that is put out with a sigh..

Du~

Mentioned in the Sunday on Monday reviews..

I agree with Syn, I really like the poem, but the last 3 lines lost me. They seem almost there, but not quite.

BD